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Smith pulled into the dinner. It was a cold July night, and it seemed the night was only going to get colder. Smith had just gotten the news that he was no longer a member of the working class. He had nothing to lose and this was just the place for him, because it had nothing to offer.
Smith entered the dinner and took the closet seat to the door which happened to be a stool at the counter. The waitress asked what he would like to have. Smith ask what the specials where. The other people in the dinner consisted of three old men in a corner playing cards, a young couple who seemed to be lost in each others eyes, and lastly another man on the stool next to his. Smith was trying to get up the nerve to pull the gun, but couldn't seem to do it. His food came and he deiced to do it after the meal. Why not get something to eat first?
As he ate he watched the people around him and wondered how there lives differed from his. The old men playing cards where joking and laughing, drinking coffee and slipping in a little something when the waitress wasn't looking making it a little Irish. They seemed to be very at ease and even called the waitress by her name. Must live close by and be regulars. The couple was in love as all young people seem to be known days. He remembered those days, he had problems then too but he couldn't remember any of them now. What more could be said about the couple they noticed nothing but each other. The dinner could come crashing down around them and they would still be simply looking into each others eyes discovering wonders that only lovers know. The man, well the man was interesting. He seemed to be on edge. He was wearing the same tattered clothes as smith himself. He stared only at his food as he shoved it into his mouth, looking around from time to time to see if anyone was going to take it from him.
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Sometimes I wonder about you Judge. Are you planning to shoot up the school?
The guy he's watching is himself, and the point of view we're in now is when he decides not to do anything and the Smith he's watching is the one who does use the gun. That's my take anyway. If I'm right or if I'm wrong, doesn't matter to me. I like it. I started to read it like it was one of those old black and white detective movies which made it even more interesting. I like it. : )
I like to watch the people around me. You notice some interesting things.
i also saw it as a black and white movie, smith had on a shabby hat and was played by humphrey bogart. keep going, i need to know more!!
Well I have discovered something new. I was thinking of leaving the ending up to the reader, but mike really got me with his, so I decide to make is ending worthless. You be mentally bankrupt with in hours.
HAHAHA HAHAHAHA I love it just cause i get to laugh. HAHAHAHA
oh sad, judge lost his mental gold? depressing. anyways, can we say the story ends there? nothing else happens, the world they live in just freezes. He never has to decide whether to end his life or not cause lives just stop.
I guess you could do that, but I could not. I have writen the next part (at least in my head), and I would never have a story where it just ends, ends. I don't think it's natural. I for one never do that with movies books or tv shows. When they stop telling me what's going on I always continue the story till I get distracted.
Judge,
Why don't you post something new. I'm interested in your strange stories. Are we gonna be roomates at BYU? Peaze brother.
I got no word on BYU. I told you that I'd tell you first. So back off a bit brather. I'm going to be there in a few weeks to visit my brother I'll give you a call when I know more.
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